It was a dark stormy night,
And Mr. Jones, of the Manor Farm,
had locked the hen-houses for the night,
His drunken presence was on show,
Which gave the animals quite a fright,
The problem was, Mr. Jones, drunken procrastinator,
Had not locked, but had loosely tided an incorrect knot,
This gave the animals the perfect time to plan there plot.
This is a short extract of poem that could last a couple of verses. This style of writing however, takes the certification out of the story and turns it into uneducated banter that would keep the attention of a 5 year old.
September 9, 2013 at 10:12 pm
Blert,
Uneducated Banter? Are you too harsh on yourself? There is something to be said for audience and purpose. We have been discussing implied readers over the last two lessons; it seems you have identified who this group would be for your poem. There is some interesting vocabulary here (presence, procrastinator).
Consider for next time:
1) Did you write a plan? If you feel the flow is too easy, then I would write a plan but also set yourself the challenge of breaking your rhyme and using punctuation and syllables to experiment with rhythm.